Crystal Charee — Fiction Editor
Developmental & Line Editing for Emerging Authors
📍 Specializing in voice, pacing, and narrative flow
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About This Portfolio
I specialize in developmental and line editing for fiction writers—helping authors refine voice, pacing, and clarity from the very first page. Each sample below demonstrates focused edits: tightening prose, sharpening tone, and balancing worldbuilding and clarity. All excerpts are used for educational critique and are not affiliated with the original authors unless noted.
Featured Samples
Sample 1 — The Pink Assassin (Crystal Charee)
Genre: Action / Humor | Editing Focus: Pacing, Character Voice, Clarity
Despite her weakness for fashion, Sally has two things going for her as an assassin that few of her contemporaries share. One is her literal, killer bod — a distraction at the best of times, a playground of carnal delights at even better times. The other is her willingness to accept that her own demise is not only inevitable, but imminent. In the assassin business, there’s always someone who wants to kill you back.
Editorial Commentary:
- Tightened sentence flow and clarified POV
- Enhanced pacing and tension while preserving humor
- Highlighted character personality and stakes
Sample 2 — A Goblin’s Mind (J.D. Dresner)
Genre: Fantasy / Humor | Editing Focus: Voice, Humor, Worldbuilding
You could understand how taken aback I was when she first entered my home in the forest nearly half a dozen sessions ago. I thought my eyes were playing tricks on me when I saw a topless woman riding a white horse into my den. I distinctly recall saying, “Please dismount, Miss Gwynth,” before realizing she could not possibly dismount herself!
Editorial Commentary:
- Maintained whimsical voice and humor
- Streamlined imagery and phrasing for readability
- Preserved pacing and quirky tone while enhancing clarity
Sample 3 — The Placeholder (Mindful Imaginist)
Genre: Fantasy / Emotional | Editing Focus: Pacing, Emotional Impact, Clarity
Aoife Brennan stood in front of the mirror, smoothing the folds of her navy silk dress. She had curled her hair just the way he used to say he liked it when they were younger — back when he still laughed with her over burnt cookies and muddy shoes. Her eyes flicked toward the hallway. Silence.
Editorial Commentary:
- Refined sentence structure for clarity and emotional resonance
- Preserved tension and suspense in a subtle, atmospheric scene
- Highlighted pacing and character voice without altering tone
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